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"someone should write me a love poem but i'm stuck doing it myself"
Daphne Gottlieb

1. when i was in high school, i had to memorize the
conjugation of the latin verb "to love."

2. i have no idea what happened to my mother's wedding
ring. last night at 12:17 am, i really needed to know.

3. "beautiful" and "amazing" just mean "beautiful" and
"amazing." nothing more.

4. i memorized the latin verb by singing the forms to the
tune of "the mexican hat dance":

amo
amas
amat

amamus
amatis
amant


5. someone called at 1:19 in the morning. the area code is
from somewhere in arizona. i don't think i know anyone
in arizona. there wasn't a message.

6. if someone lets you sleep over and has to go to work while
you're still asleep and they let you sleep in even though though
they don't really know you, it's nice to leave a thank you
note. or make their bed.

7. i haven't been beautiful in days and i need more sleep.
don't think about it too much. it doesn't mean a thing.

8. i have had my shirts altered so i can wear my heart on my
sleeve.

9. told me i'm beautiful and amazing and where are you,
who told me i'm beautiful and amazing, next time please
write it down, i will be beautiful all day after i make the
bed, amazing after i throw the latex away; how is it, the
everywhere of our hands and no trace of handwriting
anywhere

10. i still sing:

amo
amas
amat

amamus
amatis
amant

Comments

( 26 comments — Leave a comment )
eyescatchfire
Sep. 19th, 2008 11:55 pm (UTC)
I really love this one--especially 4! :)
heylight
Sep. 20th, 2008 12:35 am (UTC)
this is unique !
feathered
Sep. 20th, 2008 01:00 am (UTC)
Not my favourite poem of hers, but Daphne is amazing and it's always great to see her work.
ebourland
Sep. 20th, 2008 01:23 am (UTC)
Why that's gorgeous.
justplaincool
Sep. 20th, 2008 02:16 am (UTC)
incredible. absolutely.
renderedalone
Sep. 20th, 2008 02:44 am (UTC)
I really love this. So hard hitting.
neukpuppy
Sep. 20th, 2008 03:00 am (UTC)
Oh my god. This has just skyrocketed to one of my favorite poems of all time. It's so so sooo perfect.
the_young_poet
Sep. 20th, 2008 04:01 am (UTC)
what a great poem!
orangepeel
Sep. 20th, 2008 05:56 am (UTC)
An interesting read. I liked 9 in particular, when read in conjunction with the rest of the poem. Which is a slightly funny.
grokechild
Sep. 20th, 2008 02:50 pm (UTC)
I really don't like this! I don't know why, though. Interesting!
tripletxtreme
Sep. 20th, 2008 03:42 pm (UTC)
someone tell me how 2 and 5 fit in - im kinda lost there.
justplaincool
Sep. 20th, 2008 03:58 pm (UTC)
It's a tough call. I'd say, for 2, the wedding ring ties into the theme of love, and it being lost ties in with the poet's feeling lost and alone. For 5, maybe it's another sense of disconnect, getting phone calls at odd hours from complete strangers instead of from a lover.
neukpuppy
Sep. 20th, 2008 07:00 pm (UTC)
I was thinking for 2 that maybe she wanted to find the ring at 12:17 a.m. and wear it in order to feel loved. This will be a really ditzy comparison, but have you ever seen "Sex and the City?" You know how Charlotte wore her wedding ring even when she was divorced because she liked the way it felt? Maybe it's the same thing here.

As for 5, I don't know about you, but whenever I get a phone call from a phone number I don't know, I always think it must be really important or someone who wanted to declare their love for me or something (wow, I'm a loser). Usually it's just a telemarketer, but an unknown phone number always makes me feel like someone out there is thinking of me and wants to talk with me.

Again, this is all speculation. :P
tripletxtreme
Sep. 21st, 2008 02:31 pm (UTC)
Wow thank you, both of you.
This should totally be an lj community.
exceptindreams
Sep. 22nd, 2008 03:10 am (UTC)
What do you mean this should be an lj community?
mspixieears
Sep. 25th, 2008 01:16 pm (UTC)
it's a journal, rather than a community.
youarebananas
Sep. 20th, 2008 05:18 pm (UTC)
this is so beautiful and genuine and sincere and real.
alzzers
Sep. 20th, 2008 06:50 pm (UTC)
Absolutely love this. I, too, learned to conjugate to the Mexican Hat Dance haha. And especially #8 struck me as a beautiful line. I like how these are separated and yet there is that common thread. Beautiful.
iris_on_tape
Sep. 20th, 2008 09:33 pm (UTC)
What I loved about this is how quickly and easily it became something I could profoundy relate to. What it lacks in formal style, it makes up for in truth value. Of course, these days, what is and isn't a poem is always being redefined anyway.
pennykarma
Sep. 20th, 2008 10:39 pm (UTC)
I love Latin!
crazy_flavored
Sep. 21st, 2008 03:30 am (UTC)
I LOVE Daphne! No really, she's my favorite poet, and she's finally coming to NYC so I can see her! Great timing with this post ;)
mspixieears
Sep. 25th, 2008 01:17 pm (UTC)
damn, I'd kill to see her. I so desperately want to read more of her work.
random_penname
Sep. 22nd, 2008 02:37 am (UTC)
The title alone is great. I love it.
__vanillaskies
Sep. 22nd, 2008 01:12 pm (UTC)
beautiful and amazing. the pregnant, mysterious phone call is a great bit.
plaidseven
Sep. 24th, 2008 02:49 am (UTC)
This broke my heart.
highlyeccentric
Sep. 21st, 2011 03:51 am (UTC)
I really loved this.
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